Scientists tell us that some activities are good for health and others are bad. However, many people still continue doing unhealthy activities. What are the cause and what are the solutions for this?
In terms of
human’s
healthy, it is true that some unhealthy Change noun form
human
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behaviours
behaviors
increasingly Add the auxiliary verb
behaviors have
been did
by teenagers. There are a few reasons why many people not only ignore what scientists advise but Change the verb form
been done
also
rush into toxic activities., and many methods can helps
to tackle Wrong verb form
help
this problems
.
One cause is potential addictions. In detail, Change the determiner
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these problems
this
reason creates the
problems because some teenagers may have unhealthy habits Correct article usage
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such
as smoking, or enthusiast drinking. These addictive substances do harm to human health and lead to changes in the brain's health.
Secondly
, there is also
a common disbelief in science big factor. To explain, there are many people who do not always easily believe in the warnings of the governments. For instance
, teenagers are used to ignoring harmful some
social Correct quantifier usage
apply
platforms
which are able to be additive and complex human behaviors
. Change the spelling
behaviours
Therefore
, these reasons lead to unhealthy habits.
Several feasible solutions, namely ban on addiction substances and recommend
about the harmful Replace the word
recommendations
effect
of some social Fix the agreement mistake
effects
platforms
. To begin
with, the government and the police have strictly controlled addictive substances
trading Change the noun form
substance
behaviors
; Change the spelling
behaviours
also
,the polices destroyed such
gangs which deliver banned substance. Another measure is that there are many experts who have pointed out that some social platforms
can limit our thinking. For instance
, they recommend that we should spend time practicing
sports or studying some things.
In conclusion, Change the spelling
practising
the
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apply
human's
health problems resulting from potential addictions and disbelief in science seem inevitable in today's society. I believe that Change noun form
human
this
issue could be tackled by complying with the law and aware
of the harmful effects of social Add a missing verb
being aware
platforms
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