Some people say free time activities for children should be organized by parents. Others say that children should be free to choose what they do in their free time. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

It is often held that free
time
activities
have a significant influence on the life of the
children
.
While
some people argue that
this
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this activity
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activities
that
organized
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by
parents
are predominant in
shaping's
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a child's behaviour and future, others believe that
children
have their own right to decide the
activies
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activities
they do in their free
time
. On
one
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hand,
parents
have
resources
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the resources
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and experience to decide what
activities
better
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are better
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for their
children
.
Parents
could set up playdates,
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and children
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children
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groups, or even
enrolling
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their
children
to
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on
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classes and extracurriculars
such
as ballets, soccer, or pottery. In
this
case,
parents
could shape the
habbit
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habit
habits
of their
children
and even explore
talents
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of the
offsprings
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.
On the other hand
,
children
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children's
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personality is very malleable at
this
age and choosing their own
activities
could help them become decisive
since
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the
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very young age. Research shows
,
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ability
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to
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decide
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deciding
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between choices from
young
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a young
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age would help
children
to grow into leaders since they know what they want to do or not to do.
Children
could
also
learn about making boundaries, being
confidence
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, and learning what consequences they
got
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get
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from choosing their own
activities
. In my opinion,
children
's
activities
in their free
time
, whether
decide
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decided
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by their
parents
or not,
both
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apply
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should be supervised by
parents
and families. In the era of digitalization,
children
are
an
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easy prey to harm and wicked
activities
. In conclusion,
children
should be guarded by
parents
and families whether their free
time
decided
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is decided
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by
parents
or choose it on their own.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • balanced development
  • expose children to
  • tailored activities
  • promote discipline
  • foster independence
  • genuine interests
  • free play
  • problem-solving skills
  • emotional well-being
  • unstructured time
  • personal exploration
  • structured activities
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