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The table shows information about metro systems in six different cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows information about metro systems in six different cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The table provides information on the underground systems in six different big
cities
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 around the world.
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, it is evident that all the
cities
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 have
well developed
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well-developed
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 metro systems,
however
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, the characteristics of them vary a lot. The subway in Beijing transports 3.6 billion
of
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people and in Tokyo 3.1 billion annually, which are almost, twice the amount compared to other
cities
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 where the numbers vary from 1,2 to 1,65 billion, respectively. Noticeably, the longest subway out there, is
one
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 in New York
city
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City
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, running for over 650 miles. It has relatively low annual journeys
as well
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as
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and
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 the price remains
one
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 of the average compared to other
cities
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. In terms of prices for single tickets, London Tube costs the most ($7,30),
although
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it's
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its
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 amounts on annual journeys are the lowest.
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, the subway in Beijing, which is the busiest
one
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, has
one
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 of the cheapest single tickets
of
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at
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 under
a
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half a dollar.
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, the metro in Mexico City costs 0,23 dollars per journey,
however
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, its number of lines
as well as
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 the number of annual journeys is
one
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 of the lowest

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "as well as, however".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 86%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cities, one with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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