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some people think that we learn best through in person interaction with a teacher in a classroom.Others believe that online learning is more effective. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

#people #person #interaction #teacher #classroom
Nowadays, After the covid19 many of them prefer online learning is more effective for children.
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interaction
 way is more effective for children is more suitable. In
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 I will discuss the pros and cons of both
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 why many of them choose
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 method is attention towards
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 and live
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 will happen between student and teacher and doubts can be clarified immediately.
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, get a chance to meet new friends and
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 they can directly speak to them at that time in offline learning the exposure will be large. On the
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 online learning is preferable for the student who is lazy to go
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 to school. For
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 it will be a big advantage because they can sit in a room and finish their class. To many introvert
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 online learning will be more suitable
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 I conclude the two methods of pros and cons I personally believe that through person interaction method is more effective for students
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  • immediate feedback
  • clarification
  • complex topics
  • dynamic learning environment
  • social interaction
  • productive discussions
  • collaboration
  • communication skills
  • retention of material
  • flexible learning
  • travel time
  • fixed schedules
  • different learning paces
  • online learning
  • digital tools
  • interactive quizzes
  • multimedia content
  • discussion forums
  • hands-on experience
  • immediacy
  • lab work
  • vocational training
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