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some people think that we learn best through in person interaction with a teacher in a classroom. Others believe that online learning is more effective. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #person #interaction #teacher #classroom
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interested
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students are liked to study
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online there
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education
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illustrate
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education
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online
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 the newborn must learn a lot of things from their surrounding and from society. They make friends and they all are
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tutor
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 pros like
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issues
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there is no one going to ask a question to them, they can learn without any
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interruption
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Thus
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 both have some pros and cons and
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