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In the reading passage, the author states that
offer
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employees
the
option
of working a four-day workweek would benefit both the economy, the individual companies and the
employees
who decided to take the
option
,
while
the listening material totally
disagree
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with
this
statement.
To begin
with, the reading material mentions that the shortened workweek would increase
companies
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companies'
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profits.
However
, the
listening
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says that
this
policy may force the company to spend more money. It's costly to provide work training for these four-day working
employees
, and the health benefits they need cost the same as
five-days
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workers
. What's more, companies will definitely need to build more office space for these
employees
and to buy more computers for
workers
to use. These will spend a lot more money.
In addition
, the reading passage states that offering
this
option
will reduce unemployment rates.
However
, the listening refutes it by pointing out that employers will possibly
asked
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the
four-days
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four-day
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workers
to work
over time
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because hiring new
workers
is costly, employers may
also
raise their expectations for
four-days
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four-day
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workers
and
expecting
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them to work as the same amount of
five-days
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five-day
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workers
.
Furthermore
, the reading points out that the
option
of a
four day
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workweek would be better for individual
employees
,
while
the listening material rejects it by saying that
four-days
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four-day
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workers
may
have
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risk
to choose
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this
condition and ending up reducing their working stability because they have more free time to stay with their family and friends. So that if there is an economic
downturns
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, they may lose their jobs easier.
Moreover
, because
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five-day
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five-days
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five-day
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workers
have
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a
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more constant supervision and can spend more time on some working
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projects
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project
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, they will be more likely to
promote
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than the
four-days
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four-day
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workers
.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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