People continue doing crimes after their penaltilized. Why do you think this happens? How it can be stopped
It is argued, that there are some people
still
do evil actions after their penalty for doing something bad. Correct pronoun usage
who still
This
essay will first discuss why this
thing happens, and second how crime can be stopped.
Firstly
, the main reason why this
happens is because there are people who are unconscious of what they have did
. Wrong verb form
done
Moreover
, they are not satisfied with things
that they have done, which makes they are curious to get or do whatever they want. Correct article usage
the things
For instance
, the
Change preposition
in the
coruptors
in Indonesia, there are many corruptors who got into jail and when they are free, they still Correct your spelling
corruptors
corrupters
doing
it until right now, because they are not content with their dark income. Wrong verb form
do
However
, it still can be cut off.
Even though there are corruptors who are still being a corruptor and get money from the public's money, but
it can be decreased by downgrading or stopping the top position. Perhaps, the government should take Correct word choice
apply
an
action by making a strong law Correct article usage
apply
that is
purposed for the corruptors. Furthermore
, they can not fight against the law and they need to be lessoned occasionally about if life is not always about self-satisfy, Therefore
, they will be decreasing along with
time because of the regulation.
To sum up
, definitely, there are many crimes that have been committed by people who have been to jail. However
, it can be stopped if the government makes strong regulations for any kind of criminal action.Submitted by twiggseducationbdg on
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