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the chart below shows the results of survey about people coffee and tea buying and drinking habit in five australian cities.

the chart below shows the results of survey about people coffee and tea buying and drinking habit in five australian cities.
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The given bar chart exemplifies the consumption and purchasing habits of
tea
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 and
coffee
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 by civilians across five Australian cities. Units are denoted as a percentage.
Overall
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, most individuals in most of the cities, opt to go to a cafe for
tea
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 or
coffee
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 in the past 4 weeks as opposed to Adelaide, where instant
coffee
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 was the more popular option.
Additionally
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, Australians prefer instant
coffee
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 more than fresh
coffee
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. Melbourne and Hobart had the highest percentage of consumers which was customers who chose
coffee
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 or
tea
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 in the
last
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 4 weeks attributing to just above 60% with Sydney emerging in second with exactly 60%. People in Brisban recorded the maximum percentage of instant
coffee
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 bought in the
last
Linking Words
 month which was just more than. Simultaneously, the lowest values were
also
Linking Words
 by Brisban and Adelaide for fresh
coffee
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 which was about 35%. Melbourne, Sydney and Hobart continued to have dominant customers in
tea
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 and
coffee
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 as opposed to the other cities in the past given weeks.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tea, coffee with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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