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Some people think that cinemas will one day close due to the popularity of online streaming services

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It is believed that one day the tradition of watching films and
series
 offline via going to the
cinema
 will be replaced by gaining popularity online streaming services. I totally agree with
this
 statement and I am going to present reasons why I believe so. First of all, the pricing of streaming services is far more profitable than watching something in the
cinema
.
For example
, Netflix subscription costs around 12 euros per month and one can get access to unlimited amounts of fantastic films and
series
 in a really good quality.
Whereas
 in the
cinema
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only one
movie
 can have the exact same price. Some people may say that cinemas have a unique atmosphere and in a way it is true.
However
, my friend,
for example
, hates cinemas because of crowded halls and she can not relax and enjoy a
movie
. She prefers the home ambience where she can lie on a
favorite
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 couch, wrapped in a warm blanket, with no need to travel to the
cinema
 and spend precious time. She can make homemade popcorn that costs half as much and enjoy the
movie
 with her family and friends. Even though right now the quality in the
cinema
 is still better than on the screen of a usual PC or laptop, with technology development in a few decades or even less we may get the same watching experience as in halls with giant screens and professional sound systems.
Furthermore
, nowadays, short
series
, available online and featuring benefits of both films and long TV shows, are gaining popularity. Producers of
such
series
 can cover more topics and reveal the characters’
personality
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 better than in a two-hour
movie
;
in addition
, the viewer can develop a deeper attachment to the characters. And what is important,
such
 shows are difficult, if not impossible, to see in the
cinema
. Taking everything into consideration, I believe that in the future cinemas will definitely have to give way to online streaming because of their convenience, pricing and more intense production of
series
.
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