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Some people think that cinemas will one day close due to the popularity of online streaming services

It is believed that one day the tradition of watching films and
series
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 offline via going to the
cinema
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 will be replaced by gaining popularity online streaming services. I totally agree with
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 statement and I am going to present reasons why I believe so. First of all, the pricing of streaming services is far more profitable than watching something in the
cinema
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.
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, Netflix subscription costs around 12 euros per month and one can get access to unlimited amounts of fantastic films and
series
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 in a really good quality.
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 in the
cinema
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just
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only one
movie
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 can have the exact same price. Some people may say that cinemas have a unique atmosphere and in a way it is true.
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, my friend,
for example
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, hates cinemas because of crowded halls and she can not relax and enjoy a
movie
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. She prefers the home ambience where she can lie on a
favorite
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 couch, wrapped in a warm blanket, with no need to travel to the
cinema
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 and spend precious time. She can make homemade popcorn that costs half as much and enjoy the
movie
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 with her family and friends. Even though right now the quality in the
cinema
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 is still better than on the screen of a usual PC or laptop, with technology development in a few decades or even less we may get the same watching experience as in halls with giant screens and professional sound systems.
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, nowadays, short
series
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, available online and featuring benefits of both films and long TV shows, are gaining popularity. Producers of
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series
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 can cover more topics and reveal the characters’
personality
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personalities
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 better than in a two-hour
movie
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;
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, the viewer can develop a deeper attachment to the characters. And what is important,
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 shows are difficult, if not impossible, to see in the
cinema
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. Taking everything into consideration, I believe that in the future cinemas will definitely have to give way to online streaming because of their convenience, pricing and more intense production of
series
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.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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