Some people say that schools should teach good behavior to children and introduce them to right and wrong. Parents should not only be the ones responsible. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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A part of the population believes that both schools and

parents

should be

responsable

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responsible

for teaching children how to behave and how to make the difference between what is good and what is bad. I think it depends on

circumstances

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the circumstances

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. The first consideration is human connection.

The friendships

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Friendships

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and

kids

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kids'

kid's

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relationships are mostly formed in academic environments, so are formed at school. Individuals

beleve

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believe

that teachers,

as well as

parents

,are

responsable

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responsible

for those relations and,

in addition

, schools should provide education in

this

direction. I believe that

parents

can control how their

child

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children

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act when they are around, but in academic institutions , teachers should take the family role and teach

youngs

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young

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what is right and what is wrong. Considering the

respect

they have for others, family is the

palece

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place

palace

where they learn

this

value. In the first 7 years of life, peers

undertand

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understand

their

socially

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social

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limits and how much

respect

they should have for different age groups. Teachers are not

responsable

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responsible

for

this

aspect,

becuse

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because

this

skill is learned earlier in life.

For example

, a mother should teach her boy to speak with

respect

with

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an old lady.

Moreover

, I think most of the skills related to

respoct

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respect

are learned in

first

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the first

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yoears

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years

of life.

Therefore

parents

are the only

one

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ones

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responsable

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responsible

for them. In conclusion,

while

beleve

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believe

that both

parents

and schools should teach peers how to act with other children , I think that

respect

is learned only in families.

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Some people say that schools should teach good behavior to children and introduce them to right and wrong. Parents should not only be the ones responsible. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Last week, you visited a local supermarket and you got satisfactory service. Write a letter to the supermarket manager to thank. In your letter: - introduce yourself; - say why you are satisfied; - say thank you and write about your future visits.

organizing a large family celebration such as a wedding can often create problems. what are the possible problems and solutions?

The working week should be shorter and workers should have a longer weekend. DO you agree or disagree?

Each country has its own charity organizations. Sometimes people think that those organizations should only offer help to their own country while others thinks they are supposed to give aid to people in great need wherever they live. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook, Zalo,...) have a negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?