The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.

The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.
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layouts illustrate the current situation for the
centre
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of Islip town and its projected future development plan.
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, it is evident that the town will experience a significant transition plan which will play a vital role in turning the town into a vibrant, commercial
city
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and a
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variety
of beneficial
amenties
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amenities
for citizens.
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with, as can be seen, the northern zone is considered the heart
centre
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of the
city
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, it is pragmatic to expand the space of commercial utilities.
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, the suburban
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shops will be
instead
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a shopping
centre
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, and people can readily arrive
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shopping
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the shopping
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centre
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,As
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the bus
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station will be
stablished
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established
by it from the westnorth zone,
otherwise
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from the eastnorth zone, where the car parking will be immediately by the
centre
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. Meanwhile, the main road will be replaced and specialized for pedestrians only, to avoid any potential accidents when they
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crossing
across
to the opposite shops. Turning to the southern area, it is
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obvious
that
school
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the school
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is located
at
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the opposite side
from
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of
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the way,
therfore
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therefore
,
a
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new housing will be
sonctructed
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constructed
near
to
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the school.
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, It is
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noteworthy
that new housing will be at the junction road
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in
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northeast
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the northeast
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side.
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, developing
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carriageway around the
city
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at
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sprawling areas
,
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will play a pivotal role
to organized
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in organizing
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traffic movements in and out
the
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city
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Vocabulary: Replace the words centre, city with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Small town
  • Centre
  • Development
  • Maps
  • Plans
  • Introduce
  • Topic
  • Purpose
  • Essay
  • Description
  • Current
  • Key features
  • Facilities
  • Advantages
  • Positive aspects
  • Benefits
  • Proposed
  • Changes
  • Improvements
  • Suggested
  • Potential
  • Course of action
  • Summarize
  • Opinion
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