The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates rates of world illiteracy
according to
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gender in six
regions
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in the
last
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year.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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three
regions
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,
such
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as South
Asia
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, the Arab States and
Sub-Saharah
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Sub-Saharan
Africa, had the highest proportion of people who could not read and write, and the percentage of women was considerably more than men. South
Asia
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, the Arab States and Sub-Saharah Africa had the most significant impact on world illiteracy, accounting for about 40% in average for the
population
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average population
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,
while
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the remaining
regions
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,
such
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as East
Asia
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/Oceania, Latin America/ the Caribbean and developed countries, made up under one fifth from the total. Women, who cannot write and read, accounted for about half in three of the most illiterate
regions
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, whilst men made up one-third. In stark contrast, developed countries and Latin America/ the Caribbean had a slight difference between these groups.
However
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, in East
Asia
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/ Oceania, there was a significant difference between women and men, accounting for 20% and 8%, respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
Vocabulary: Replace the words regions, asia with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Illiteracy rates
  • Region
  • Gender disparity
  • Bar chart
  • Estimated
  • Summarise
  • Main features
  • Comparisons
  • Analyzing
  • Discrepancies
  • Significant
  • Pronounced
  • Speculation
  • Male
  • Female
  • Global perspective
  • Literacy
  • Educational attainment
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Cultural influences
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