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Many people believe that technology creates significant impact of modern life. Do you agree or disagree?

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In the recent years,
technology
 has greatly transformed the way of
life
 of the society. There are
people
 who agree and disagree
to
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with
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this
 motion. I totally agree that
technology
 has shifted the course of humanity in various ways.
Technology
 has increased
covenience
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convenience
 and efficiency in daily
life
 and enhanced learning and education.
To begin
 with, some
people
 disagree that
technology
 is not creating a huge impact
with
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 the current living status of the
people
.
This
maybe
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may be
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 because they choose to live a simple
life
, away from the city and settle in rural places.
For example
, my grandmother has lived a
life
 the same way back when she was young. She refuses to invest in
machineries
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machinery
types of machinery
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 and chooses to do things the old-fashioned way as it brings
heppiness
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happiness
 to her. Some
people
 may have the same notion as her
that
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 is why they disagree with the impact of
technology
 in their lives.
On the other hand
,
technology
 has helped
in making
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to make
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 daily
life
 more efficient and convenient.
For example
, at home, there are different machines that
helps
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help
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 with daily household chores. There are ovens and microwaves to help with cooking,
waching
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washing
watching
 machines to help clean clothes, drier
machine
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machines
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 to quickly dry them, and air conditioning
unit
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units
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 to refresh individuals from increasing environmental heat during summer. These
has
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have
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 been innovated over the years.
In addition
, it makes education and learning be changed from conventional to online. Most
people
 opt for the use of
technology
such
 as
computer
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computers
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 and
internet
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the internet
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 to change the environment of learning places.
For example
, my son can now participate and learn lessons from the convenience of our own home and can relearn the topics over again.
This
 is efficient in dealing with different kinds of educational
system
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systems
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. In conclusion, I totally agree that
technology
 has changed and
carried
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had
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 an impressive impact
to
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current
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the current
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 lifestyle
among
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of
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 the current civilization.
Technology
 brings
efficient
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efficiency
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 and convenience
with
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to
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the
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apply
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household chores and
also
 enhances the learning of students.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • revolutionized
  • accessibility
  • improved
  • convenience
  • efficiency
  • opportunities
  • contributed
  • sustainability
  • enhanced
  • transformed
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