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Brick manufacturing had seven steps to delivery ready made products.

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Brick manufacturing
had
Wrong verb form
has
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 seven steps to
delivery
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deliver
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ready made
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ready-made
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 products. First of all, the clay is
digging
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dug
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 and
then
 passed through the metal grid.
Furthermore
 , sand and water are
adding
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added
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, after it is going to forming or using wire cutter for
making
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make
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 the shape of
bricks
.
In addition
,
bricks
 will dry in
oven
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the oven
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about
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for about
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 24-48 hours.At the next stage of the drying process ,in the kiln, they are baking on moderate and high temperatures. Temperatures can reach from 200C to 1300C. Following that, the products are
cooling
Wrong verb form
cooled
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 in
chamber
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the chamber
a chamber
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 of the order of 48-72 hours.
As a result
,ready
bricks
to
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for
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 delivery are packed and
then
 carried by truck. The
bricks
 are manufactured
to
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by
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 companies, who connected with
building
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the building
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 industry.
This
 type of making
bricks
 is more effective without being hurtful
for
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to
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 nature.
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Provide more detailed information about each step of the brick manufacturing process.
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