The given two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010
The
given
two pie charts below show the online shopping Verb problem
apply
sales
for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010. Each pie chart illustrates the number of
percentage of online Correct quantifier usage
apply
sales
in electronics and appliance
, food and beverage, home furnishings and video games.
Both Fix the agreement mistake
appliances
of
pie charts Change preposition
apply
given
Wrong verb form
give
in
percentages Change preposition
apply
in
four retail sectors. Online Change preposition
for
sales
of electronic
and Replace the word
electronics
appliance
in 2005 compose nearly Fix the agreement mistake
appliances
one third
(35%), which had dropped Add a hyphen
one-third
for
a tiny fraction (5%) in 2010. The amount of food and beverage Change preposition
by
rise
Replace the word
rose
for
almost 10% in 2010. Change preposition
by
The
modest twenty Correct article usage
A
percentages
(10%) of online Replace the word
per cent
sales
in home furnishings fell in five
Correct determiner usage
a
year
period, which Correct your spelling
five-year
constitute
the most epic fall with Change the verb form
constitutes
small
proportion in Add an article
a small
electronics
retail sector. Video games have only an insignificant minority Correct article usage
the electronics
reached from
18% to 23% growth despite Wrong verb form
reaching
five
Correct determiner usage
a
year
period.Correct your spelling
five-year
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