With a fast pace of modern life more and more people are dependent on fast foods as their main meals. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays,

people

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have consumed more fast

food

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and

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become a major trend in their eating habits. Fast

foods

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bring some benefits to

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people

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life

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but have

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thread

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the

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human

health

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. On the one hand,

time

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is the most valuable asset in modern life and fast

foods

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help to

people

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for saving

time

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people

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spend at least three hours

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meals daily basis but buying

food

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from burger shops

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only fifteen minutes.

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lead

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save

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time

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and

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that

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on more important things

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hobies

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hobbies

or work. Another advantage of these

foods

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are

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having

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affordable price. After the corona pandemic, the world

faced

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with

food

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infilation

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inflation

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cause

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increases in

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food

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prices especially

meat based

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protein sources. Most

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apply

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the

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fast

foods

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contain too much

carbonhydrate

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carbohydrate

carbohydrates

rather than protein

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keep

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the prices low. So, the

people

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still can afford

those kind

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foods

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the

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fast

foods

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have a potential danger

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the

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human

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and these disadvantages outweigh the benefits.

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, they contain too

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calories which

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causes

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obesity and diabetes with over consuming.

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, lots of

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and

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added

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these kind

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foods

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for

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protect them through to supply chain.

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, these chemicals cause

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cancer in the long term with accumulation in the

human's

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cells.

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, these companies' main focus

is deliver

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is to deliver

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the

foods

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fastly

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fast

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and cheap which brings

lack

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a lack

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hygen

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hygiene

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, workers are in these restaurants not qualified enough to work with the

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foods

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food

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This

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conditions lead to

serve

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serving

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foods

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that can poison

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apply

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the

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apply

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people

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. In conclusion,

the

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fast

food

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restaurants serve

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with

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affordable

price

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prices

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short

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time

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but when we look from

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health

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perspective, they are harmful to the human body in different aspects. Those

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are not minor and governments should find a solution.

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the

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public

health

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can

affect

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from

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them

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seriously.

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Make sure to address all parts of the prompt in your response. This includes discussing both the advantages and disadvantages of consuming fast foods.

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Provide more specific examples and evidence to support your ideas. This will strengthen your arguments.

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Organize your ideas in a clear and logical manner. This will enhance the coherence and cohesion of your essay.

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Expand your vocabulary and use a wider range of vocabulary to express your ideas more effectively.

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Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

325 words

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With a fast pace of modern life more and more people are dependent on fast foods as their main meals. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

You recently bought a children’s toy online but when it arrived it was damaged. Write a letter to the manager of the toy shop. In your letter: • describe what the problem with the toy is • suggest how the damage may have happened • say what you would like the manager to do

Nowadays the environmental problems are to big to be manage by individual persons or countries. In other words, it is an internationl problem. to what extend do you agree or disagree?

Some think the best way to motivate and encourage people to work hard is to pay them based on how much they produce and sell. To what extent do you agreee or disagree with this opinio

It is important to use land for human needs such as farming, housing and industry than to save it for endangered animals. Give reasons for you answer and include any relevant examples from you own knowledge or experience.