With a fast pace of modern life more and more people are dependent on fast foods as their main meals. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?
Nowadays,
people
have consumed more fast food
and this
become a major trend in their eating habits. Fast foods
bring some benefits to the
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apply
people
's life
but have Fix the agreement mistake
lives
major
Add an article
a major
thread
to Correct your spelling
threat
the
human Correct article usage
apply
health
.
On the one hand, time
is the most valuable asset in modern life and fast foods
help to people
for saving time
. For instance
, people
spend at least three hours for prepare
meals daily basis but buying Wrong verb form
preparing
food
from burger shops take
only fifteen minutes. Correct subject-verb agreement
takes
This
lead
to Correct subject-verb agreement
leads
save
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saving
time
and spend
that Wrong verb form
spending
time
on more important things such
as hobies
or work. Another advantage of these Correct your spelling
hobbies
foods
are
having Change the verb form
is
a
affordable price. After the corona pandemic, the world Change the article
an
faced
with Add a missing verb
was faced
food
infilation
and Correct your spelling
inflation
this
cause
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caused
to
increases in Change preposition
apply
the
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apply
food
prices especially meat based
protein sources. Most Add a hyphen
meat-based
of
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apply
the
fast Correct article usage
apply
foods
contain too much carbonhydrate
rather than protein Correct your spelling
carbohydrate
carbohydrates
for
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to
keep
the prices low. So, the Change the form of the verb
keeping
people
still can afford those kind
of Change the determiner
that kind
those kinds
foods
.
On the other hand
, the
fast Correct article usage
apply
foods
have a potential danger for
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to
the
human Correct article usage
apply
health
and these disadvantages outweigh the benefits. Firstly
, they contain too much
calories which Change the quantifier
many
cause
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causes
to
obesity and diabetes with over consuming. Change preposition
apply
Secondly
, lots of additive
and Fix the agreement mistake
additives
preservative
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preservatives
added
to Add a missing verb
are added
these kind
of Change the determiner
this kind
these kinds
foods
for
protect them through to supply chain. Change preposition
to
Furthermore
, these chemicals cause to
cancer in the long term with accumulation in the Change preposition
apply
human's
cells. Change noun form
human
Lastly
, these companies' main focus is deliver
the Change the verb form
is to deliver
foods
fastly
and cheap which brings Correct your spelling
fast
lack
of Correct article usage
a lack
the
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apply
hygen
. Correct your spelling
hygiene
Also
, workers are in these restaurants not qualified enough to work with the foods
. Fix the agreement mistake
food
This
conditions lead to Change the determiner
These
serve
Wrong verb form
serving
foods
that can poison to
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apply
the
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apply
people
.
In conclusion, the
fast Correct article usage
apply
food
restaurants serve foods
with
affordable Change preposition
at
price
in Fix the agreement mistake
prices
short
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a short
time
but when we look from the
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a
health
perspective, they are harmful to the human body in different aspects. Those affects
are not minor and governments should find a solution. Replace the word
effects
Otherwise
, the
public Correct article usage
apply
health
can affect
Wrong verb form
be affected
from
Change preposition
apply
them
seriously.Correct pronoun usage
apply
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