The chart shows British Emigration to selected destinations between 2004 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows British Emigration to selected destinations between 2004 and 2007. 

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates how many British emigrations to five different countries (Australia, Spain, New Zealand, the USA, and
France
) over a four-year period from 2004 until 2007.
Overall
, Australia was the most selected destination throughout the given period
while
New Zealand and the USA were in the
last
two places.
To begin
with, the number of Britania people who came and lived in Australia stood at just above 40,000 people in 2004,
then
had a slight decline to just below 40,000 in the following year before increasing dramatically and reaching a peak at about 51,000 in 2006, after which dropped to approximately 44,000
at the end
of the period.
Although
, Spain and
France
had different points to start the number of people from Britania moved to these countries
were
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was
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at the same point in 2005 roughly 33,000.
Thereafter
Spain and
France
plummeted in the following two years to about 28,000 and 19,000 respectively. Regarding the other two countries with lower levels, New Zealand saw a downward trend and started at about 23,000 at first before declining to precisely 20,000 in 2007.
In contrast
,
France
showed a peak at 33,000 before hitting a trough of just nearly 18,000
at the end
.
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