In developing nations, there is an increase in international tourism. Is this more advantageous or disadvantageous?

With the advent of modern means of transportation,
people
around the world can travel abroad much easier than
the
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past. There is a growing trend of global tourism in
third world
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countries, which has positive and negative effects on the host nation.
While
there exists a risk of cultural elimination, if controlled, cross-national interactions can be beneficial for both sides. It is truly argued that weaker nations, either economically or culturally, are immensely influenced by the more powerful ones. The past decades have shown that
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Western culture has dominated the world via entertainment means.
Although
tourists
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interactions are brief with the developing nation, the high frequency of
such
facings would end in a deep influence. Turkish-Iranian cultural relationship,
for example
, has reflected
into
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a great change in the fashion taste of a large group of Iranian youth. So, it is rational to get worried about the dominant culture's impacts.
Such
encounters,
on the other hand
, simply promote diversity. Advocates of the notion of more
tourists
'
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claim that the more
people
visit less-known regions, the better they grasp the cultural differences.
This
leads to a more progressive population;
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of
people
who are much better willing to accept the concept of otherness. The host
people
have the chance
of understanding
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others, too.
This
is more valuable than the economic benefits
tourists
bring to their country. Dubai,
for instance
,
due to
the great number of international interactions, has become a cosmopolitan multi-national
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city. I strongly believe that it is
advantegous
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advantageous
for less developed countries to have international
tourists
. Though, there is a nuance. Authorities shall keep an eye on
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international connections.
People
of the weaker nation must have the chance to promote themselves in an equal manner and the sense of self-worth shall be boosted in a way to make them protect their identity. In conclusion, both sides have valid arguments.
While
doubts about negative cultural impacts are true, if controlled positive outcomes seem more realistic.
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