some people think that museums should be enjoulyable places to entertain people while others believe that the purpose of museum is to educate people . discuss both views and give your opinion

Some people argue that
museums
should be
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an
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entertainment places.
while
others believe it is for educational purposes .
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I personally with
museum
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for educational purposes and
this
essay will examine the reason.
To begin
with,
museums
from the enjoyable perspective, individuals prefer visiting
museums
to enjoy their time and observe the differences between
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and present . In other words, individuals travel abroad to visit
museums
in
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their vacation because they
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relaxation and they feel inspired .
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, the survey done in 2023 at Sultan Qaboos University showed the number of visitors who visit Oman
museums
yearly
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more than 100
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.
Therefore
, it seems logical that
museums
are one of the entertainment places.
On the other hand
,
museums
from
educational
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perspective, it is the best way to learn
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for students because explaining subjects
likewise
history with visible materials
it
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helps to understand the subject better and it gives students
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idea but, if they study without trip to museum the information in the book is just abstract words .
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according to
Oman TV student understands the Mona Lisa subject more when they see it in
museums
and they know all the details related to
this
painting.
This
means it is a method for studying and the benefits of
museums
for education purposes
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huge,
To sum up
,
although
some argue that
museums
are enjoyable places because people go there to enjoy their free time. I believe it is educational
due to
the learning trips give the learners all the information that they need indirectly.
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  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • entertain
  • educate
  • exhibits
  • interactive displays
  • artifacts
  • history
  • knowledge
  • learning
  • entertainment
  • engaging
  • enriching
  • stimulating
  • inspiring
  • informative
  • perspective
  • appreciation
  • balance
  • opinion
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