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Some employers are giving more value on hiring people with good social skills apart from good qualifications. Do you agree or disagree that social skills are just as crucial as good qulification for success work?

#employers #value #people #skills #qualifications #qulification #success #work
I do agree with the
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statement
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 social
skills
 are just as crucial as having good
qulifications
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qualifications
 within the
work
 industry. Reason number one. I believe the
skills
 you learn from everyday life and through
work
 experience can
deffinitly
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definitely
 improve your
skills
 within any
work place
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workplace
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. Most
people
form
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from
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 the early years of life like in the 60s and 70s were brand new to the
work force
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workforce
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 and had zero experience and they learned most of their
skills
 from everyday life and working as an intern or doing
work
placment
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placement
 to learn the
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ropes
,
with out
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without
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 any qualifications. So in my opinion if they
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could
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 do that back
then
 with no qualifications most
people
 should be able to
achive
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achieve
 a job as well in
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 modern time. Reson number two. In modern times like
today
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today,
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people
 are
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definitely
 seeking extra education
such
 as degrees and
masters
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master's
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qualification
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qualifications
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 to get them into
such
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apply
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specific jobs
such
 as engineering and teaching. As for
thoes
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those
 types of jobs that need
such
 qualifications. But you will find most of these
people
that
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who
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 undergo
such
 education end up lacking in social
skills
.
Lastly
, in
todays
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 age
socail
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social
 media is taking over and everyone is glued to
the
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their
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 phones and computers. So keeping
thoes
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those
 social
skills
 in tact for everyday use and within the
work force
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workforce
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 is slowly declining. As to why
i
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I
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 agree having social
skills
 is way more important
then
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than
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 having some fancy qualification.
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