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People now have the freedom to work and live anywhere in the world due to the development of communication technology and transportation. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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Today, the evolution of communication technology and transportation can cause individuals to have the privilege of working and living in any location in the world. In my opinion, there are two drawbacks which outweigh the advantages, like lack of sole residence location and benefit of the other
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 development can cause humans' freedom to work and live anywhere in the world can affect their
lives
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 on the negative side especially families'
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 because they do not have the same living house in one location.
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, when a man who has a family, wants to change the
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 to work abroad, he must take the children as well.
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, children can not adapt to specific schools or
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, which can affect negatively their social adaptation, like making a particular friend.
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, working and living abroad can benefit the economy or different fields of other countries.
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, if one doctor or businessman goes to work out of the
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, they would gain profit from the health or economic side of
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 state, which they can gain profit
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 their native
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 of other countries. These days, many individuals can not satisfy their
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 and desire to abandon the territory for their
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 there is an advantage, people who do not want to live in their own
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, are free to leave the
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 as well.
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, humans can make new friends or neighbours which could affect them positively in their
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, and help them to socialize.
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 the development of communication technology and transportation can cause individuals to socialise positively, it
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 by the disadvantages, which include lack of gain benefits and kids' lifestyles.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • communication technology
  • transportation
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • freedom
  • work and live
  • development
  • increased job opportunities
  • flexibility
  • work-life balance
  • cultural exposure
  • diversity
  • economic growth
  • globalization
  • social isolation
  • loneliness
  • loss of community
  • sense of belonging
  • expensive cost of living
  • housing
  • strain on infrastructure
  • resources
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