12.The chart below shows the types of communication training taken by employees in an international company and the reasons why they took part in this training. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The graphs below display 5 types of communication preparation that an international organization’s workers did and why they have chosen these courses.
Overall
, part-time trainings
had the biggest market share, Change the wording
training
pieces of training
then
is the self-tuition, while
the others are not significant. The reasons why employees choose to do these courses is primary
because of holiday travelling.
The course with the highest Change the word
primarily
overall
share is the part-time training at
Change preposition
in
evening
with 39%, the next Correct article usage
the evening
higest
proportion is the part-time classes at Correct your spelling
highest
weekend
, which is 17% lower than the ones taken Correct article usage
the weekend
at
Change preposition
in
evening
. Self-tuition has the same percentage as the weekend classes, which is 22%. The Correct article usage
the evening
last
two are intensive training with a small minority of 12%, and distant learning a tiny fraction of 5%.
The principal motive why they took these classes is because of holidays, with nearly a
half of the total. The next biggest Correct article usage
apply
overall
share is business travel with almost a fifth, while
the reason of personal interest only occupied a
14% and communication with clients Correct article usage
apply
one tenth
. Add a hyphen
one-tenth
Finally
Add a comma
Finally,
other
reason had a proportion of 13%Correct quantifier usage
another
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