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The table illustrates the proportion of monthly household income five European countries spend on food and drink, housing, clothing and entertainme

The table illustrates the proportion of monthly household income five European countries spend on food and drink, housing, clothing and entertainme
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The table shows the ratio of monthly income of a household that
spend
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 on different categories
such
 as housing, garments, enjoyment, and
food
 in five different
countries
.
Overall
, spending on culinary and housing is more than
a
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half of the budget in a household of all
countries
.
While
 the highest category in
France
,
Germany
, and the UK households is housing, it is
food
 and drink for the two
mediterrian
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Mediterranean
countries
. The three major
countries
 that spend almost
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a
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one-third of
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their incomes
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incomes
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their incomes
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 on housing are
France
,
Germany
, and the UK.
Moreover
,
France
 has the lowest percentage of clothing with 7%, and
Germany
 has the most significant entertainment ratio of 19% compared to its counterparts.
Food
 and drink spending is 25% in
France
 which is slightly higher than
Germany
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in Germany
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 (with 22%), and lower than
the
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 UK (with 27%). The remaining
countries
 are the dominant competitors
of
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in
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 the
food
 sector with 36% and 31%, in Turkey and Spain, respectively. Turkey only put 10% of their outlay to entertainment which is %5 higher
in
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than
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 Spain. Housing expenditure only
cost
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 18% of Latin people which has the cheapest housing opportunities between the five
countries
.
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