the table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities.
The given table illustrates the systems of underground
railway
in six different cities (Fix the agreement mistake
railways
London
, Paris
, Tokyo, Washington DC, Kyoto, Los Angeles) which measured
by opening date, Add a missing verb
are measured
route
(in kilometres
), and passengers
per year (in millions). Overall
, underground
Correct article usage
the underground
station
in Tokyo had the most passengers
in 1927 while
underground
Correct article usage
the underground
station
in Kyoto had the fewest passengers
in 1981 although
they are
from the same country. Excitingly, European underground Wrong verb form
were
station
namely Fix the agreement mistake
stations
London
and Paris
had the highest passengers
and the longest Correct quantifier usage
number of passengers
route
than American underground station
.
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stations
To begin
with, Japan
underground Change noun form
Japan's
station
in Tokyo and Kyoto which opened in 1927 and 1981 served 1927 million
and 45 million
passengers
, respectively. Those
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That station
Those stations
station
had 155 kilometres
and 11 kilometres
in routes subsequently
.
Furthermore
, underground
Correct article usage
the underground
station
in London
city
opened in 1863 had Capitalize word
City
the
longer Correct article usage
a
route
(394 kilometres
) than Paris
city
(199 Capitalize word
City
kilometres
) that
opened in 1900. Correct pronoun usage
which
London
station
dealt with 775 million
customers while
Paris
station
dealt with 1191 millions
. Compared to Change to singular
million
those European
Change the determiner
that European station
those European stations
station
, American station
served the lower score, for the Fix the agreement mistake
stations
route
also
the quantity of passengers
, both Washington DC station
which opened in 1976 and Los Angeles station
which opened in 2001. They had 126 kilometres
and 28 kilometers
Change the spelling
kilometres
route
length, they Change preposition
of route
also
had 144 million
and 50 million
customers, subsequently
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