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The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The table provides underground railway systems information in six different cities based on the date opened,
kilometres
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 of route, and
passengers
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 per
year
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 (in millions).
Overall
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, Washington DC has the highest route development per
year
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.
In addition
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, Tokyo services more
passengers
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 than others and has the highest proportion of
passengers
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 per
kilometre
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 per
year
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,
while
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 Kyoto is the less crowded underground train system and Los Angeles scored the lowest services in
passengers
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 per
kilometre
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 per
year
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.
To begin
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 with,
although
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 the system was built in 1976, Washington DC experienced the highest rate of route creation per
year
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 with almost 3
kilometres
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 per
year
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, followed by London (approximately 2,5
kilometres
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 per
year
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), Paris and Tokyo (slightly under 1,5
kilometres
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 per years), Los Angeles (roughly 1
kilometre
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 per years), and Kyoto (below 0,5
kilometres
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 per years).
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, Tokyo is marked as the pinnacle in
passengers
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 per
year
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 with 1927
million
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 per
year
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 and almost 12
million
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passengers
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 per
kilometre
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 per
year
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, and Kyoto is the lowest with 45
million
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passengers
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 per
year
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. Yet, Los Angeles scored the lowest passenger per
kilometre
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 per
year
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 with no more than 2
million
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words kilometres, passengers, year, kilometre, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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