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The bar chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart represents the proportion of income spent by households during one week in one country in the years 1968 and 2018.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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food
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 was the highest proportion of spending in 1968,
while
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 by 2018 the most popular thing was leisure. There were three items that experienced rising trends, which were housing transport and leisure respectively,
by contrast
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,
food
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, fuel and power, clothing and footwear and personal goods had downward trends throughout the whole period. In 1968, households spent 35 per
cent
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 of their money on
food
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, and it was
also
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 the biggest proportion of consumption, yet it decreased dramatically in 2018, which was close to 17 per
cent
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. Fuel and power,
as well as
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 personal goods,
as well as
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 personal goods, had the equivalent trend for
food
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, both dropped to just 4 per
cent
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.
In addition
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, households spent 9 per
cent
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 of their money on leisure by 1968 which rose to 22 per
cent
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 in 2018, which has the largest changes over the fifty-year period.
Furthermore
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, housing and transport accounted for 10 per
cent
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 and 8 per
cent
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 and grew to 19 per
cent
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 and 14 per
cent
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 by the year 2018.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "as well as".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 3 times.
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