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Many goverments think that economic progress is their most important goal,however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Almost every government in the world pursues the notion of advancement, and in
this
regard
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 a group of them only aim for financial
progress
 and the
other
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others
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 follow other aspects of advancement, too.
First
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 group, frankly, argue that the economic issues are the root cause of other problems or
progresses
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progress
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. The
second,
on the other hand
,
think
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 for a sustainable society education, health,
wellfare
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welfare
, and other needs shall be met. Among the most powerful countries in the world, almost each and every one of them is an economic power. So, it is valid to argue that
economy
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the economy
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 is the leading driving force of a
country
. The annual
defense
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defence
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 budget of the US armed forces,
for instance
, is as twice
as
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the total budget of a relatively large
country
 like Iran. Billions of US dollars are at the American government's
dispense
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expense
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 for health and education. All of these have happened thanks to the enormity of
country's
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the country's
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 economy. Governments, substantially, are responsible for every aspect of society and human lives. Not only is it important to boost economic
progress
, it is equally important to enhance the quality of life.
Furthermore
, malignant regimes with great economic power in hand have shown that the power of money will not necessarily convey
towards
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better lives for citizens. The USSR regime, which collapsed in
late
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the late
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 1980's, is an example. So, for a sustainable
advancement
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advancement,
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 it is crucial to keep other notions of
progress
 in mind. I strongly agree with the group
who
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that
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advocate
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advocates
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the
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apply
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multi-lateral
progress
. A living example of uneven
progress
 is
hsppening
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happening
 in my
country
, Iran.
Although
 the
country
 owns
large
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 oil and gas reservoir, a not-balanced
progress
 plan has led to serious problems for citizens. In conclusion, despite the fact that a great economy is the most capable for its citizens'
wellbeing
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well-being
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, it is essential to make
such
 capability happen in real life by leveraging all means of
progress
.
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