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The charts below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010

The charts below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010
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The chart below illustrates the cost of consuming goods in France and the
UK
 in 2010. The figures are shown in
pounds
 sterling.
Overall
, it is obvious that cars were the most popular among all the given consumptions
while
 the
less
Correct quantifier usage
most
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 consumer thing was perfume during the mentioned year in both countries. When it comes to vehicles
UK
 reached its peak at 450,000
pounds
 sterling and the indicator was less just by 50
pounds
 sterling in the other given country.
On the contrary
, people used to use perfume not frequently and the expenditure on the goods was 250 sterlings in France and the statistic was less than 150
pounds
 in the
UK
 in 2010. Spending on books was slightly more than 400,000
pounds
 sterling in Great Britain,
however
, the trend differs with just 100
pounds
 in France. It is experienced that demand for technology
such
 as computers
were
Correct subject-verb agreement
was
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 about 380 sterling in the first given country and the figures indicate 350,000
pounds
 in the
UK
 over the period. Another important device is the camera and expense was marginally more than 350,00
pounds
 sterling in Great Britain
while
 the index almost halved in other countries in 2010.
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  • expenditure
  • consumer goods
  • chart
  • countries
  • overall
  • compare
  • analyze
  • categories
  • consumer spending
  • trends
  • proportions
  • statistics
  • increase
  • decrease
  • significant
  • notable
  • remarkable
  • substantial
  • considerable
  • determine
  • conclude
  • in conclusion
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