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The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two diagrams illustrate the data about committing
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crime
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crimes
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 based on age and the proportion of
crime
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 types in the United Kingdom in the
last
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 year.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 young people did more
crime
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, and violent
crime
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 was the most common for criminals in the UK. Regarding the age of people who commit a
crime
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, there was a large percentage of criminals, aged
by
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12-28 years old, with the largest number of 20-year-old young people, accounting for 80 per cent of tens of thousands of crimes. 16 and 24 years old were in the second and third places, making up 70 and 60 units of crimes, respectively. Crimes, committed by 28 and older public, were numbered less than 20, with a slight decline by 60-years-old senior criminals.
According to
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 the pie chart, violent
crime
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 accounted for almost half of the total number of violence.
Although
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 property and drug
crime
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 were the same frequency
,
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 and made up about one-fifth, public order
crime
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 was the least common with less than 10% of the general.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words crime with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • The line graph depicts
  • The pie chart illustrates
  • reveals
  • displays
  • depicts
  • the trend of
  • the overall crime rate
  • steadily decreased
  • the distribution of
  • different types of crime
  • prevalent
  • accounts for
  • the most common crime
  • followed by
  • make up
  • a smaller proportion of
  • the total crimes
  • a smaller percentage
  • approximately
  • the remaining percentage
  • It is important to note that
  • reflects
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