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Nowadays, distance-learning have gained in popularity, but some people argue that courses can never be as good as those taken by attending a college or university in person.To what extent do you agree or disagree

#popularity #people #courses #college #university #person
The effectiveness of
distance-learning
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distance learning
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 has long been a topic of
debates
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. Some people believe that courses learning far from
university
 might not
as
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 good as those taken by attending a college or
university
. Considering the above
arguement
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argument
, I think that the efficiency of
distance-learning
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distance learning
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 might
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 on various reasons and cases. On one hand, distance education might not be as productive as
directly
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 ones because of the lack of interaction.
Students
 attending virtual learning courses can
be complicate
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 to ask for help from professors, tutors and college mates as they have to connect to them through social
medias
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media
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 or email, which can put them in
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 passive position because not everyone has time to reply immediately.
This
 might cause inconvenience in addressing difficult tasks if individuals are in
hurry
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.
For example
,
students
 at
university
 tend to wait 1 to 2 days to be answered by the lecturers.
Moreover
, the internet connection can contribute to the
interuption
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interruption
 of
learning
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the learning
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 process which can cause
lack
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a lack
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 of comprehension.
On the other hand
, e-learning may
brings
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 learners more benefits than those who participate in
university
. Attending college far from campus can reduce the living cost.
Students
 who learn at home can save
renting
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 money
as well as
 transportation fees, which are the two main expenses.
Furthermore
,
this
 type of
courses
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course
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 provides attendants with convenience as they can study here and there at any time with the same qualified curriculum
with
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 those at
university
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the university
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.
Researchs
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Researchers
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 have shown that there are more than 50%
postgraduate
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students
 attend distance master programme
due to
its
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their
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 flexibility of time and place
as well as
cost
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 of living. To recapitulate, online learning may have pros and cons,
students
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but students
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 should consider
to decide
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apply
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whether face-to-face or distance learning
are
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is
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 suitable for them.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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