TRAFFIC AND ACCOMMODATION PROBLEMS ARE INCREASING, AND THE GOVERNMENT SHOULD ENCOURAGE BUSINESS TO MOVE FROM CITIES TO RURAL AREAS. DO THE ADVANTAGES OUTWEIGH THE DISADVANTAGE?

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across the world.
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the congestion in
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urban areas, urbanization and industrialization are the promising remedies that the
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zone will be examined before my conclusion is reached. On the one hand, urbanization can improve the well-being of people living in rural areas as they do not need to leave their
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for working
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in the cities,
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they can have a job near their
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home
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, a new
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position for local residents.
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, they can be happier
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with their beloved parents and children
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transportation and
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mitigate the traffic and
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,
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industrialization
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some drawbacks. The first drawback is to deteriorate the environment. Because the nature
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to be replaced by the infrastructure
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as roads, high building, and so on, the environment will be polluted by the waste from industries.
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, the government need to invest
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enormous amount of state property to construct facilities including hospital, school, and
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government need to spend 3,000 million Baht to build all facility for the new industrial zone in Phuket, which
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to save a lot of people from poverty. In conclusion,
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expanding the business zone to
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area
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will be disastrous to the environment and worth a billion Baht, its benefits absolutely outweigh its drawbacks
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to
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problems, and
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income
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local people.
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