TRAFFIC AND ACCOMMODATION PROBLEMS ARE INCREASING, AND THE GOVERNMENT SHOULD ENCOURAGE BUSINESS TO MOVE FROM CITIES TO RURAL AREAS. DO THE ADVANTAGES OUTWEIGH THE DISADVANTAGE?
In
Change preposition
At
the
present, Correct article usage
apply
high
density of Correct article usage
the high
population
in Correct article usage
the population
capital
city is Add an article
the capital
a capital
the
major Correct article usage
a
problems
across the world. Fix the agreement mistake
problem
As
the effort to overcome Change preposition
In
with
the congestion in Change preposition
apply
the
urban areas, urbanization and industrialization are the promising remedies that the Correct article usage
apply
authority
should Fix the agreement mistake
authorities
do
. In Verb problem
use
this
essay, the pros and cons of expanding the bussiness
to Correct your spelling
business
Correct article usage
the contryside
contryside
zone will be examined before my conclusion is reached.
On the one hand, urbanization can improve the well-being of people living in rural areas as they do not need to leave their Correct your spelling
countryside
Fix the agreement mistake
homes
home
Fix the agreement mistake
homes
for working
in the cities, Change preposition
to work
Correct word choice
where
which
they can have a job near their Correct word choice
where
Fix the agreement mistake
homes
home
. Fix the agreement mistake
homes
For example
, a new industrail
area in Chonburi province in Thailand Correct your spelling
industrial
provide
Change the verb form
provides
a
numerous Correct article usage
apply
job's
position for local residents. Change noun form
jobs
Moreover
, they can be happier to stay
with their beloved parents and children Change the verb form
staying
Therefore
, they can spend more quality time with their family, save cost for
transportation and Change preposition
of
Correct your spelling
accommodation
accommodations
accomodation
for living in the big cities, Correct your spelling
accommodation
as well as
mitigate the traffic and Correct your spelling
accommodation
accomodation
problems
Correct your spelling
accommodation
On the other hand
, industrailization
Correct your spelling
industrialization
industrialisation
also
have
some drawbacks. The first drawback is to deteriorate the environment. Because the nature Correct subject-verb agreement
has
need
to be replaced by the infrastructure Change the verb form
needs
such
as roads, high building, and so on, the environment will be polluted by the waste from industries. In addition
, the government need to invest a
enormous amount of state property to construct facilities including hospital, school, and Change the article
an
transporation
. To illustrate, Correct your spelling
transportation
Thai
government need to spend 3,000 million Baht to build all facility for the new industrial zone in Phuket, which Correct article usage
the Thai
these amount
can Change the determiner
this amount
these amounts
use
to save a lot of people from poverty.
In conclusion, Wrong verb form
be used
although
expanding the business zone to rural
Add an article
a rural
area
will be disastrous to the environment and worth a billion Baht, its benefits absolutely outweigh its drawbacks Fix the agreement mistake
areas
due to
effective solution
to Fix the agreement mistake
solutions
high density
problems, and Add a hyphen
high-density
generate
income Wrong verb form
generating
to
local people.Change preposition
for
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