The charts below show agricultural production in two different regions of the country.

The charts below show agricultural production in two different regions of the country.
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The diagrams demonstrate the proportion of agricultural production in two areas Western and Eastern regions, divided into many varieties,
such
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as
meat
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, dairy, grain, and
vegetables
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.
Overall
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, Eastern countries consume more dairy
products
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and
vegetables
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than the opposite side, the amount of
meat
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consumed is equal in both areas
while
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Western citizens give their preference to grain over
meat
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and any other
products
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.
To begin
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with, the Eastern resident's diet consists of
meat
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and milk
products
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, 35% and 30%, respectively.
Moreover
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, Asians do not prefer to eat as many
vegetables
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and grains as Western ones, and equal to 20% and 15%.
On the other hand
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, Westerns consume the same amount of
meat
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as Eastern citizens and match 35%.
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, despite that over 45% of their diet consists of grain, taking almost half of the statistics.
In addition
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, the
vegetables
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and dairy
products
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are on the lowest points, 5% and 15% respectively.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words meat, vegetables, products with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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