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Completing university education is thought by some to be the best way to get a goodjob. On the other hand, other people think that getting experience and developing softskills is more important. Discuss both sides and give vour opinion

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It is considered by some that being a university graduate is the key to securing a good
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,
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while there
 are others who think that it is better to have
experience
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 and soft
skills
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. In my opinion, I
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believe that
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 education is essential for academic jobs,
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are more
 useful in business. On the one hand, many think it is easier for most
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 to find a good
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 if they are
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university graduates
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good
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.
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, having
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 education puts
people
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 one step
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ahead of
 others who do not and
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 can be the deciding factor in getting a good
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. The competition to
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 to universities and the increasing number of graduates show just how significant
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of education
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's future
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 opportunities.
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, having
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experience
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 and soft
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other interpersonal
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, can
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For many
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thought that
 having relevant
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 in that line of
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 or having acquired useful soft
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 that can
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be valuable
 to a company, can put one ahead of the game when applying for a
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, in my opinion, whether
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of education
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 or
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 and
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, depends
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on the
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 being applied for. Take
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be considered
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it would
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it would
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 and
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business so
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business
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the company
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the company
 In conclusion, getting a good
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 requires a relevant background either in
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 or
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education depending
 on the type of
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 and field.
People
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 should make sure they attain the necessary
skills
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and ordegrees
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degrees
 before applying for a
job
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 in order to be sure of success.
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