This line grapgh shows the upping tendency in population of Columbia, Yamhill and also Washington in the U.S state of Oregon in the period from 1940 to 2000.

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line graph
shows the upping tendency in
population
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the population
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of
Columbia
,
Yamhill
and
also
Washington
in the
U.S
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U.S.
state of Oregon in the period from 1940 to 2000.
According to
the graph, it can be clearly seen that all three lines
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increased,
however
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all of them changed in
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different ways.
Columbia
had the lowest
population
at the start of the count,
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about 25000
people
.
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compared
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with 30000
people
in
Yamhill
and with the highest
population
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according
to the graph, in
Washington
at around 75000
people
. The years from 1940 to 1970 show that the
population
of
Columbia
had risen to 36000. It could
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that it was a
little
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small
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increase, but
anyway
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it's about 40% from the beginning of the
growth
.
Yamhill
population
also
rose by
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half of the starting number, from 30000 to 45000
people
. In spite of
this
two countries had
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great
growth
, the biggest increase was noticed in
Washington
, where the
population
increased from 75000 to 125000. By
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2000,
Columbia
and
Yamhill
risen
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for the same amounts,
like
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they had risen thirty years ago. In 2000
Columbia
's
population
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for
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35000,
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and Yamhill's
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population
increased
for
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60000 from 1940. Even
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though the
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growth
of the
population
of
Washington
between 1940 and 1970 was huge, its
growth
for the next thirty years was sharper, from 125000 in 1970 to 240000
people
in 2000
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