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The three pie charts illustrate how many hours in a British university library are spent by undergraduates and postgraduates compared to other students.

The three pie charts illustrate how many hours in a British university library are spent by undergraduates and postgraduates compared to other students.
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The three pie charts illustrate how many
hours
 are spent by undergraduates and
postgraduates
 in
compared
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 to all
others
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other
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students
 in the library of the British university.
It is clear that
 the
postgraduates
 stay
in
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longest
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longer
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 than all others.
For example
, 51 per cent of
postgraduates
 are in it over fifteen
hours
,
whereas
 undergraduates just one in ten and the average
students
 a little bit more - one in seven. But what is
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wonder
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,
the
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 number of
students
 who are passing from 8 to 14
hours
 is approximately close in all groups and
don’t
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doesn’t
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 exceed 35 per cent, at the same time close to
a
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apply
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two thirds
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 of the undergraduates spend no more than 7
hours
 for his work in the library,
furthermore
 only
one half
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one-half
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 of the common
students
 pass as
mush
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much
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. What about
postgraduates
, there
are
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is
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 a tiny minority, how can afford it
.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 93%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, postgraduates, students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrate" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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