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The table below shows the contribution of various economic sectors to Xcountry Gross Domestic Product in 2016, 2017, and 2018. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the contribution of various economic sectors to Xcountry Gross Domestic Product in 2016, 2017, and 2018. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given table illustrates the percentage
various
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of various
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 economic divisions’ contribution to the Gross Domestic Product (
GDP
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) of Xcountry in 2016,2017, and 2018.
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, Industry was the most stable
sector
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 in terms of improvement and service dominated the
GDP
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 support each
year
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.
To begin
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 with, the proportion of
GDP
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 by Industry was 22%. Other 3% of the contributions were added in the following
year
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.
This
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sector
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 eventually
raised
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 its peak in 2018 by 30%. Unfortunately,
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 trend happened
to
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in
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service
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the service
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sector
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. Starting with
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with
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65% in 2016, the proportions went down to 64% and 55% respectively in 2017 and 2018.
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, agriculture experienced fluctuation. In the first period, it supported 13%
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GDP
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of GDP
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. It
then
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 reduced to 11% in the next
year
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 and
then
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upraised
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raised
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 to 15% in 2018.
Service
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The service
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sector
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’s domination was quite visible each
year
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. In 2016 alone,
this
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sector
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 impacted 65% of the
GDP
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while
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 other sectors were
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below
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 25%. It
was
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slightly decreased in the following
year
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 but
remain
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remained
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 dominant. In 2018, the number went down tremendously to 55%, but
this
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 was still the highest compared to other divisions.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words gdp, sector, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 2 times.
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