People nowadays tend to have children in older ages. do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

The grown-ups nowadays have
this
decision as parents to get kids in their middle ages. There are numerous advantages and disadvantages to
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kids
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older ages which will be discussed
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the following paragraphs. As far as I am concerned the benefits outweigh the drawbacks. The paramount benefit of
this
choice is having less difficulty feelings in parents. As
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proof, you can refer to all young mothers and fathers around you. Most of them feel
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and they always think they lost something about their youth. Regrettably, they are not wrong. For
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example, imagine a young mommy and daddy who have an adventurous life with
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of hobbies and
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before they become a mother and a father. Now they should get their mama and papa roles and skip some of their fun times.
In addition
to that, the next profit of
this
chosen option is about the life experience. As life goes on, you become more experienced. You have more
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with different issues and
as a
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you learn a lot from them. So
according to
that process, an older person may be a better mom and dad in wisdom aspects because she or he has more maturity than a younger person.
On the other hand
, we might see some cons in that situation.
Age
difference problems are not the things that you can ignore. Too
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age
differences can cause a lot of conflicts in a family and the most important one is the elders are not able to understand the
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needs and thoughts.
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, I invite you to depict a family
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mom and dad are in the
age
of 50 and the children are about 15. How a 50-year-old man can understand a
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needs? It is mostly impossible.
To sum up
,
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that the decision of the good
age
for having children depends on the owner, it has acceptable benefits to have kids in old
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. You are suitably mature and you have enough knowledge to raise and educate a child by yourself.
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