The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
It is argued that scientist should
be give
their innovation to develop Change the verb form
be given
be giving
life
of humankind. I strongly agree with Add an article
a life
the life
this
statement, this
essay will discuss and explain the reason behind
.
In general, Medical Correct pronoun usage
behind it
knowledges
in technologies and practices must be useful for human Change the wording
knowledge
pieces of knowledge
bits of knowledge
society
. The reason is there are many population
around the world that Change to a plural noun
populations
having
a disease and illness and rely on Wrong verb form
have
people
who understand how to cure it and knowing
the Wrong verb form
know
symptomps
before the disease Correct your spelling
symptoms
spread
in Wrong verb form
spreads
society
. for, example, one of the gratest
Correct your spelling
greatest
pandemic
ever had was influenza, Change to a plural noun
pandemics
people
nowadays understand how to cure it and how to avoid the flue disease, it happened because soe
of all Correct your spelling
some
cientist
who found Correct your spelling
scientists
the
way to cure it Correct article usage
a
had
already Wrong verb form
have
share
Wrong verb form
shared
to
human Change preposition
apply
society
, so it brings human lifes
comeback to peaceful condition.
Correct your spelling
lives
Moreover
, people
tend to live in well
Change the adverb
good
condition
and have perfect Fix the agreement mistake
conditions
life
Fix the agreement mistake
lives
along
their Change preposition
throughout
life
. In certain Fix the agreement mistake
lives
area
, Fix the agreement mistake
areas
due to
the lack of people
with medical background people
are
really believe and Unnecessary verb
apply
rely
their medical problems to Add the preposition
rely on
rely upon
the
Correct article usage
apply
people
with minimum knowledge of medical experience so they are tend
to choose Change the verb form
tend
people
with minimum experience rather than believe in people
with no experience about
medical and it is acceptable as long as the person Change preposition
in
know
the way proper. Change the verb form
knows
However
the
Correct article usage
apply
scientist
should be monitored by the Fix the agreement mistake
scientists
goverment
and authorities to avoid malpractice and producing inappropriate or Correct your spelling
government
unproper
innovation to Correct your spelling
improper
the
Correct article usage
apply
society
.
To conclude
, the people
who had serve
their Wrong verb form
have served
life
as a scientist need to share their Fix the agreement mistake
lives
innovation
to distribute a piece of Fix the agreement mistake
innovations
peaceful
world and healthy Add an article
a peaceful
society
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