The graph shows the percentage of male and female academic staff members across the faculties of a major university in 2012. Summarise information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The graph shows the percentage of male and female academic staff members across the faculties of a major university in 2012. Summarise information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the proportion of academic
staff
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by gender among six faculties in a specific university in 2012. Viewing from an
overall
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perspective, it was evident that male
staff
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were more dominant almost in all faculties, especially in engineering, but, in the
faculty
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of education, the number of female
staff
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was significantly higher. Looking closer, males comprised just over 80% of the
staff
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in the engineering
faculty
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, which was more than 4 times of the female members.
Likewise
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, in the
faculty
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of business, the proportion of male
staff
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was about 60%, and the difference between the number of males and females was around 20%.
In contrast
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, in the
faculty
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of education, the female
staff
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contributed more compared to the male
staff
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which was a little below 80%.
Similarly
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,
although
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the gap was not as big as what it was in the
faculty
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of education, the female
staff
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outnumbered the male
staff
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approximately by 10%. In both the law and science faculties, the gap between the two was exactly 20% and slightly more than 20% respectively in which the amount of male
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is higher, but,
on the other hand
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, in the
faculty
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of medicine, the percentage of female cadre was slightly higher in which the difference was merely 1%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words staff, faculty with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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