The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewables in the year 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewables in the year 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewables in the year 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The four charts compare the
electricity
Use synonyms
generated in
Germany
Use synonyms
and
France
Use synonyms
in 2009.
Overall
Linking Words
, it can be seen that conventional thermal was the main
source
Use synonyms
of
electricity
Use synonyms
in
Germany
Use synonyms
,
whereas
Linking Words
nuclear was the main
source
Use synonyms
in
France
Use synonyms
. In terms of different
electricity
Use synonyms
sources, both countries indicated
to
Fix the infinitive
apply
show examples
produce the same types,
however
Linking Words
, the distribution of them is, noticeably, different. Almost sixty
percent
Change the spelling
per cent
show examples
of
electricity
Use synonyms
is produced by conventional thermal, leaving the rest almost equally divided by nuclear
as well as
Linking Words
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
renewables, in
Germany
Use synonyms
.
In contrast
Linking Words
, nuclear accounted
to be
Verb problem
for
show examples
the biggest
source
Use synonyms
in
France
Use synonyms
,
of
Change preposition
with
show examples
nearly 80%. Other sources showcased between 10 and 14
percents
Fix the agreement mistake
percent
show examples
.
What
Correct word choice
When
show examples
comes to the distribution of renewables, these sources have significant differences among the countries.
While
Linking Words
France
Use synonyms
indicated to have one dominant
source
Use synonyms
, hydroelectricity,
Germany
Use synonyms
produced
electricity
Use synonyms
equally from biomass
as well as
Linking Words
wind followed by nearly 20% for hydroelectricity and a small amount of 7%
of
Change preposition
for
show examples
solar. In terms of those in
France
Use synonyms
, the amounts produced were not that significant, 10.5% for wind and 8.1% for biomass with nearly 1% for solar
electricity
Use synonyms
.
Furthermore
Linking Words
, none of the countries produced geothermal energy.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "as well as".
Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, germany, france, source with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "indicated" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • electricity generation
  • renewable sources
  • conventional thermal
  • nuclear power
  • hydroelectric power
  • biomass
  • wind energy
  • proportion
  • distribution
  • significant
  • contributor
What to do next:
Look at other essays: