Some people think that mobile phone should be banned in public places such as libraries, shops and on public transport. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement?
It is often argued that mobile
phones
should be prohibited in public spaces, while
others feel that cell
phones
Fix the agreement mistake
phone
use
in public areas is crucial when there is an urgent situation. Prohibition of smartphones in public places
is laudable, but I don't agree fully and believe that their usage should be allowed in public areas but with some restrictions.
On the one hand, here are significant facts and reasons that affirm that mobile phones
should be banned in places
like knowledge centers
, shops, public transportation, and many other public Change the spelling
centres
places
because it has been the reason for the annoyance of other people
in many ways. This
drive is to prevent accidents and disturbing comfort. For example
, a library mainly focus
on providing a Change the verb form
focuses
queit
environment for readers. Correct your spelling
quiet
However
, when people
use
smartphones inside the
libraries, the Correct article usage
apply
tranquility
of the environment is lost. Another reason, the Change the spelling
tranquillity
use
of mobile phones
while
driving is one of the main reasons for the increase in road an
accidents today. Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
Use
of this
device on public transportation is violation
of law.
On the one hand, limiting the Add an article
a violation
use
of cell
phones
in public places
can prevent people
from staying in touch with their families if an emergency occurs. For instance
, if someone is travelling in a public vehicle and his family needs to update him on a very urgent issue, banning the use
of cell
phones
would make it impossible. Cell
phones
can easily be switched to silent/vibrate mode, this
will not distract people
due to
loud ringtones of incoming calls or messages.
In conclusion, based on the reasons mentioned above. I personally believe that smartphones should be allowed in public places
but with some restrictions in place so that they can remain in touch with their family and friends whenever they need.
Fix the infinitive
to.
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