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Some people believe that the present is better than the past.some people think the opposite. Why is your opinion?

#people
Every person
on
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this
 world
,
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chose
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 which was the best
life
 for him or her between the present
or
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and
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 the past. It
is depend
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 on their experiences. There are some humans
believe
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who believe
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 that the present is better than the past.
While
other
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others
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, disagree with that view.
Therefore
, I will write about them
with
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 giving reasons or examples to explain their own opinion and what is my opinion. The people
whom
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who
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 think that the nowadays is better than the past. One of
them
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the
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 causes is
their
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there
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 will be
conscious
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a conscious
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 generation about how
it
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is psychological health very important to live in pleased.
In addition
, there
are
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knowlodge
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knowledge
 in all of the majors.
For example
, there are many medicines for each
diseases
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disease
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, so humankind can live more than in the past.
Also
, human beings improved
the
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tecnology
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technology
 until we are using
the
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AI in
diffirent
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different
 ways in our
life
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lives
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 and
make
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making
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 it easy.
Moreover
,
the
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transportations
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transportation
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are
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is
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 more comfortable than
the
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in the
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 past,
due to
 it
was taken
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taking
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long
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a long
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 time or months
in
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 a trip.
However
, there are some
group
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groups
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 of individuals who maintain that the
last
 ages were
batter
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better
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 than now. First of all, their
lifes
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lives
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 were completely different than these days, because old people were really friendly and
kindness
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kind
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.
Furthermore
, the environment was the cleanest and healthiest time in the world. Because
of
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of this
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, there were less car use and pollution. Not only, at the moment there
a
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high cost of living and transportation, taxes and low
salary
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salaries
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.
As a result
, elderly people prefer their old
life
 because of the growth of
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the economic
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economic
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economy
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. But
also
, they were not fixated on the news and
feel
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felt
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stressful
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stressed
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 or
looking
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looked
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on
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at
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 their mobile.
Consequently
, they would do more physical exercises, sports and playing manual games.
Although
 in the past
the
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life
 was quiet and simple, nowadays with
improvement
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the improvement
an improvement
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 of
technologies
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technology
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life
 is much easier and faster than
the
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in the
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 past. In my opinion, I prefer today days
due to
 the highest quality of producing medicines by using new development devices.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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