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Some people believe that violence on television and in computer games has a damaging effect on the society. Others deny that these factors have any significant influence on people's behaviour. What is your opinion?

#people #violence #television #computer #games #effect #society #factors #influence #behaviour
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 development of technology
people
 have started spending a lot of time
in
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 their
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gadgets
gardens
. Certain humans believe that watching abuse on
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 can cause terrible problems
while
 others
totally
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concider
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consider
 that
such
 content cannot damage mental health. I
am absolutely consider
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 that
violence
in
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on
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 the internet
do
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does
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 not affect
on
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people
's
behavior
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behaviour
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. First of all, every
behavior
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 starts forming
since
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 childhood and the main role
plays
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 family. The
behavior
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, manner of
speach
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speech
, and
espessially
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especially
tendency
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the tendency
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 to aggression
goes
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 from
parents
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parents'
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 style of education. If parents argue a lot, home
violence
 exists, child will grow
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up hating
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to
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other innoсent
people
 and they will try to do the same evil which exists at home. For
examle
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example
, at my school was a boy who always tried to hurt girls
unil
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until
class
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the class
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had
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discovered that he had serious problems with his mother.
Thus
, a lot of
agression
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aggression
 can appear
due to
 improper education of children and
such
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ones
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one's
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 life. Anyway,
although
 some
people
 strongly consider that all of the
nedativity
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negativity
nativity
 that
people
 can watch on TV or in any other content will affect them, I doubt it. Any
manifistation
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manifestation
manifestations
 of
violence
 has always been and history is
a
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proof of that. For as long as humanity has existed uncountable number of wars
had
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 been fought and in that time
people
 lived
withought
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without
internet
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the internet
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.
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, during The Second World
War
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War,
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 humans were killed just for their race.
Hence
, gadgets do not play
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a significant
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 role in changing
people
's mental health. Taking everything
in
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 consideration it can be concluded that even
thought
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though
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internet
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the internet
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 can include elements of
violence
, it does not affect
for
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people
's
behavior
otherwise
 the world would go crazy.
That is
 why I am totally sure watching
such
 content
do
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 not influence
to
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himan's psychology.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pivotal
  • desensitize
  • catalyst
  • predisposed
  • harmless outlet
  • distinguish
  • controlled environments
  • empirical research
  • minimal or no direct correlation
  • socio-economic status
  • predisposition
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