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More and more people are working from remotely from home. To what extenct is this a positive or negative developemnt?

#people #home #extenct #developemnt
working right now is becoming more
remotely
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remote
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 and people can do their
job
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jobs
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 from home. In my opinion,
This
 is
completely
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a completely
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 positive development because workers can
work
 freely with their own schedule and
this
 will lead to less environmental damage.
Labourer
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Labourers
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 can
work
 abundantly with their own schedule from their house with less stress.
In other
words
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employee
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employees
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 will have less pressure and tension from the
work
 environment, They don’t have to express traffic or
to
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apply
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be nervous
from
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about
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 communicating directly with other employees.
For example
,
labour
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labourers
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 can create a flexible timetable to achieve the
work
 she or he has need to do from the Place they feel reassured
in
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apply
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with
the
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apply
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suitable breaks to not be overwhelmed by
work
. another positive effect
from
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of
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 working at home is less environmental damage and impact.
this
 is because there will be less environmental pollution and lower air contamination from carbon dioxide released from
car
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cars
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due to
 less driving to labour
place
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workplace
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.
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, as the pandemic
become
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became
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 a serious issue, companies and
work
 associations launched the decision of remotely working to reduce the level of air pollution. In conclusion,
distant
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distance
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 working
have
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has
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 enormous benefits to both
labourers
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labourer's
labourers'
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 comfort and
flexibilty
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flexibility
 and to the
environment
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environmental
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 condition.
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