Some people advocate death penalty for those who committed violent crimes. Others say that capital punishment is unacceptable in contemporary society. Describe advantages and disadvantages of death penalty and give your opinion.

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Since ancient times,
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have tried to find different ways to punish crimes. One
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punishment, which is still used in some countries today, is the
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penalty
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essay will look at the pros and cons of
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and describe
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opinion about it. On the one
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there are some number of advantages of
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,
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as cutting off the situation at the root and intimidating
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the problem at once, completely,
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can help prevent the terrible consequences that could have occurred.
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, in China,
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who are caught corrupting themselves are subject to the
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penalty
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, as are their relatives, and
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measure
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helps to minimize the problem. Intimidating
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also
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plays a role, because when
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around them see the consequences of bad deeds, they stop wanting to do the same. As an example, China, mentioned above, where the level of corruption has reached a minimum in the
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50 years.
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, the
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penalty
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has some advantages in the form of fear and reduction of a number of problems.
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,
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an act has a huge number of disadvantages, the most glaring of which is that
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believe they have the right to take another
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's life. They did not give the condemned
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life, and
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of faith are generally convinced that only God can administer justice. The worst thing that can happen is to find out the innocence of a
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after his execution. There are many examples in history when it turned out that a
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was innocent after his execution, and the criminal continued to be free.
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, the
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penalty
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is the most extreme
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. Personally, I am convinced that
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a
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should not be applied to
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, after all, we live in the 21st century and there are many other ways to punish a
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, which can be even more cruel than
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. In conclusion,
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people
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may have committed serious crimes, they should be treated humanely and given a second chance. I believe that human life is very precious,
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it should always be preserved.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Advocates
  • Capital punishment
  • Contemporary society
  • Violent crimes
  • Deterrence
  • Retribution
  • Cost-effectiveness
  • Imprisonment
  • Innocent
  • Unethical
  • Inhumane
  • Misuse
  • Legal systems
  • Heinous crimes
  • Closure
  • Moral concerns
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