some people say that the best way to improve road safety is to increase the minimum legal age for driving cars or riding motorbikes. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

Nowadays, deaths caused by
accidents
on the
road
have increased significantly. Some people are of the opinion that by increasing the minimum age for driving vehicles, we could ensure
road
safety
at its optimum level. I disagree with the phenomenon. My viewpoints are discussed in the following paragraphs. There are so many solutions that can help to enhance
road
safety
.
To begin
with, the government has to make driving license exams tough. So, people are forced to learn about all
traffic
regulations,
road
signs and their meanings. Once civilians are well aware of
traffic
regulations,
accidents
are less likely to occur.
Furthermore
, the government would need to fix the speed limit
according to
road
types.
For example
, one needs to maintain an average speed of 70 m/h on a motorway which is usually a broad
road
but on the other side drivers should not overspeed on narrow streets especially nearby residential areas to avoid
accidents
.
In addition
to that, there should be strict punishment for breaching
traffic
laws. CCTV cameras are required to observe every street's transportation movement and those who break any
rules
should be penalised with a heavy fine and
as a result
other drivers
also
keep
rules
in their mind and the majority of them are likely to follow all
traffic
rules
which will contribute towards enhancing
road
safety
. what is more, there should be investigation firms involved, whose aim is to track illegal racing activities which are frequently organised in countries
such
as India, Dubai, United Kingdom, Canada and the USA. In order to win the race, racers tend to
overspeed
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and sometimes they lose control of
car
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accidents
and
consequently
, it would impact other cars which are probably in their route.
To conclude
, it is
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that imposing
such
rules
and strict supervision will play a crucial role in ensuring
road
safety
.
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