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The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduates students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduates students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.
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The graph bars above illustrate the destination of
UK
 graduates compared to
destination
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the destination
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 of
UK
 postgraduates, both in 2008 and excluding
the
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apply
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full-time
job
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jobs
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. It's clear that most
UK
 graduates and postgraduates would continue to study.
On the contrary
,
the
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apply
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voluntary work was the least option
that
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apply
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chosen by both groups. Almost 30,000
UK
 graduates chose to get deeper knowledge into their studies,
while
 nearly 18,000 individuals had part-time
occupation
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occupations
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.
However
, it seems 16,235 people struggle to have a stable job, even though they have a bachelor's degree altogether with them.
Moreover
, only 3,500 did voluntary work in 2008.
On the other hand
,
majority
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 of former
postgratduate
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postgraduate
 students took
further
 advanced studies in the United Kingdom, yet the number is small compared to bachelor's degrees at only 2,725. Around 2,500 people with master's degrees engaged in part-time work,
while
 1,625 individuals were not able to land a single job. The number of voluntary,
nevertheless
, are smallest of all at just 345.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pursue
  • enhance
  • skillset
  • gain experience
  • expand knowledge
  • acquire
  • develop
  • employment prospects
  • participate
  • contribute
  • job market
  • seek
  • apply for
  • opportunities
  • gain valuable insights
  • explore
  • unemployment rate
  • entrepreneurship
  • set up
  • initiate
  • establish
  • start a business
  • self-employment
  • chart
  • data
  • statistics
  • graduate
  • postgraduate
  • students
  • college
  • full-time work
  • leaving
  • further studies
  • part-time work
  • internships
  • volunteer work
  • travel
  • starting own business
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