The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduates students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduates students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.
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The graph bars above illustrate the destination of
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graduates compared to
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the destination
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of
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postgraduates, both in 2008 and excluding
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apply
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full-time
job
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jobs
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. It's clear that most
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graduates and postgraduates would continue to study.
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voluntary work was the least option
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chosen by both groups. Almost 30,000
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graduates chose to get deeper knowledge into their studies,
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nearly 18,000 individuals had part-time
occupation
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.
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, it seems 16,235 people struggle to have a stable job, even though they have a bachelor's degree altogether with them.
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, only 3,500 did voluntary work in 2008.
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the majority
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of former
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postgraduate
students took
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advanced studies in the United Kingdom, yet the number is small compared to bachelor's degrees at only 2,725. Around 2,500 people with master's degrees engaged in part-time work,
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1,625 individuals were not able to land a single job. The number of voluntary,
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, are smallest of all at just 345.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words uk with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • pursue
  • enhance
  • skillset
  • gain experience
  • expand knowledge
  • acquire
  • develop
  • employment prospects
  • participate
  • contribute
  • job market
  • seek
  • apply for
  • opportunities
  • gain valuable insights
  • explore
  • unemployment rate
  • entrepreneurship
  • set up
  • initiate
  • establish
  • start a business
  • self-employment
  • chart
  • data
  • statistics
  • graduate
  • postgraduate
  • students
  • college
  • full-time work
  • leaving
  • further studies
  • part-time work
  • internships
  • volunteer work
  • travel
  • starting own business
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