The leaders of most organisations tend to be older people.However, some argue that younger people tend to make better bosses. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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What age group should a boss be in - is the most common topic of discussion in the modern
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some argue that older
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are better suited for
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role, another group of
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stands for the younger generation. I agree with
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who believe that the younger generation should be given more
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, younger
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bring fresh
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and innovation to the organization.
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of younger
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works better. Research by Cambridge doctors gives the exact number to prove. The figure shows 30%. The brain of
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whose age is less than 30, works 30% better than
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who
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50. By bringing fresh
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, it is easier to grow, to develop.
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, Elon Musk began bringing fresh
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into the
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at a young age. It all started with the transfer of money via the Internet
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and currently continues with electric cars and spaceships. If you read his biography, you can notice that all his successful businesses that have borne fruit nowadays, started when he was under 30.
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, younger
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are more adaptable and open to change. Especially, in today's modern
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everything changes quickly,
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is the most necessary quality for leaders.
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, once again about Elon Musk, when he noticed the growth of artificial intelligence, he began -
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to invest, and
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- to interact his business with
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area.
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, we can see that he is the richest man on the planet now. In conclusion, I would like to give the opportunity to the younger generation to take leadership positions
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their flexibility in the modern
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and bringing fresh
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to the company or team.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • leadership qualities
  • innovation
  • adaptability
  • experience
  • wisdom
  • interpersonal skills
  • youthful energy
  • progressive thinking
  • forward-looking
  • efficient decision-making
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