You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children's charity located in the USA spent and received in one year, 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children's charity located in the USA spent and received in one year, 2016.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
This
picture
represent
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the amount of
revenue
sources and expenditures of a USA Charity in the year
of
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2016. These two pie charts reflect that donated food accounted for the biggest
revenue
source, contributing
86,5
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86.5
% of all revenues.
Program
services accounted for
the
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most of the expenditure with 95,8% of all outgoings. The other categories indicated
much
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smaller percentage. Community contributions, who were the second largest source of
revenue
, only brought in 10,4% of
overall
charts. The following sources had
almost
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insignificant impact on
overall
revenue
,
such
as
program
revenue
(2,2%), investment income (0,2%), government grants (0,2%), and other income (0,4%). There are only two expenditure categories
besides
program
services,
such
as fundraising (2,6%) and management and general (1,6%) respectively. In conclusion,
total
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income sources they generated (53.561.580 US dollars)
had
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surpassed
total
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the total
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expenditures they spent (53.224.896 US dollars). Donated food and community contributions alone could cover all of the
program
services budget.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words revenue, program with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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