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Human activity has had a negative impact on plants and animals around the world. Some people think that this cannot be changed, while others believe actions can be taken to bring about a change.

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In reality, human activity brings a lot of negative
imp[acts
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impacts
 on the environment. Some people might think that we cannot improve
this
 problem as we have the biggest priority ,
whereas
 others say that we can make it better by changing our behaviour. In
this
 essay, I will argue both sides and make my own opinion.
To begin
 with,
this
 issue is actually hard to overcome because we need to take over the habitats of other creatures almost every time.
For example
, we need to cut
the
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trees
for producing
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 wooden products like chairs. Another example is that we sometimes need to do deforestation to build houses or other buildings.
In particular
, a lot of species are suffering from the rubbish
especially
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 plastic. Creatures in the sea like whales frequently die because they eat too much plastic products. The problem is that we do not have other options except throwing it away on the sea.
This
 is because they will produce toxic gas once they are combusted.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • negative impact
  • extinct
  • deforestation
  • pollution
  • habitat destruction
  • mitigate
  • reverse
  • stricter regulations
  • protected areas
  • endangered species
  • education and awareness campaigns
  • biodiversity
  • consequences
  • renewable energy sources
  • organic farming
  • eco-tourism
  • environmental regulations
  • sustainable practices
  • natural ecosystems
  • preserve biodiversity
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